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alliterator
 Posted: Mar 10 2012, 05:04 AM
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Here. I deepened it a little and made the tempo quicker. I hope that works - any deeper and it sounds like it was made intentionally deep.

If it doesn't work, that's fine; you can find someone else to voice the answering machine. I'm okay with that.


Faces, Strange and Secret: An Anthology of Stories from da Fears Mythos: on sale from Amazon, Kindle, and Smashwords

My Finished Stories.

My Ongoing Stories:
Channel Fear (informational, educational, cynical)
The Supernatural Anaesthetist (seeing where science takes us)
Once There Was (the king is the kingdom)
An Old Man's Winter Night (at the winter of the world)
Unwashed and Somewhat Slightly Dazed (working for the man)
The Secret History of the World (unstuck in time)
Notes from the Underground (a place to stay)
Phantasmagorical (a bedtime story)
Paranoia: A Manifesto (wrecking the wall)
The Day The Music Died (running from sound and sorrow)
Abraham's Men (knights, ghosts, and shadows)
Pest Control (pulling the wings off of flies)
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DJay32
 Posted: Mar 10 2012, 05:08 AM
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I'll keep this one saved, and.. we'll see where it goes from here. I'll let you know if I use this.


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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DJay32
 Posted: Apr 18 2012, 03:34 AM
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TO-DO LIST:

- Get Jane to send in a Duchess answering machine message, because we have two Blackcap messages from.. I believe that's Parakus, that are both for Duchess.

- Upload more of the Mordecai messages.

- Fossil posts. I'm beginning to think we should just skip these altogether. xD

- The HELP investigation. What is it supposed to reveal?

- That one site I made for the North branch. God, yes, I'm glad I made it, but I just.. gah, I don't have the patience to keep logging into Firefox whenever I want to update it. I guess I can leave that one for a bit.

- Figure out what the story was for this thing. Then wrap up the first movement just so I can say I'm making progress.

CHARACTERS AND VOICE ACTORS:

Liquid Len: Bones.
Duchess: Cadet (probably).
Doctor Cloud: ??? (alliterator, you are still an option, but considering your voice was also used for your test subjects, I don't think we should use you.)

Mordecai: Somnam.
Blackcap: Parakus.
Doctor Walls: Allanbag.

Ian Manning (Camper): alliterator.
Selkie: Love.
Lazarus: Foolamancer.
Test subject things (Homunculi): alliterator.

We have no shortage on voice actors, for the record. If ever you think you have a scene that you'd like done in audio, we'll prolly make a separate thread for that kind of thing, but basically, it'll most likely be done in audio! :D

In fact, I'm gonna make a separate thread for this now, a basic list of characters.


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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alliterator
 Posted: Apr 18 2012, 04:02 AM
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I still think you should do the Fossil posts, if only because I want to reveal all the names we gave them. But they shouldn't be the main thing - that's the HELP plot and the missing website and the slowly revealing Camper takeover of the Genera centers.


Faces, Strange and Secret: An Anthology of Stories from da Fears Mythos: on sale from Amazon, Kindle, and Smashwords

My Finished Stories.

My Ongoing Stories:
Channel Fear (informational, educational, cynical)
The Supernatural Anaesthetist (seeing where science takes us)
Once There Was (the king is the kingdom)
An Old Man's Winter Night (at the winter of the world)
Unwashed and Somewhat Slightly Dazed (working for the man)
The Secret History of the World (unstuck in time)
Notes from the Underground (a place to stay)
Phantasmagorical (a bedtime story)
Paranoia: A Manifesto (wrecking the wall)
The Day The Music Died (running from sound and sorrow)
Abraham's Men (knights, ghosts, and shadows)
Pest Control (pulling the wings off of flies)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 03:57 AM
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HELP won't reveal anything. Not by itself. HELP is merely there to introduce to the reader that FT-HADES is up to something.

I should make another Hades-blog that would reveal more, and Liquid Len would find it and post about it. Yes. Okay, I'm starting to really figure this out. In the meantime, my last question is "When do I want Liquid Len to make a big deal about EAT and get Doctor Cloud to point him to J. LaBrie?" Do I want to expand a bit more on HADES first or should I just go and end the first movement already?


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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alliterator
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 04:10 AM
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I don't know. If you want, you can concentrate on HADES on the other blog and then on EAT on the main blog.


Faces, Strange and Secret: An Anthology of Stories from da Fears Mythos: on sale from Amazon, Kindle, and Smashwords

My Finished Stories.

My Ongoing Stories:
Channel Fear (informational, educational, cynical)
The Supernatural Anaesthetist (seeing where science takes us)
Once There Was (the king is the kingdom)
An Old Man's Winter Night (at the winter of the world)
Unwashed and Somewhat Slightly Dazed (working for the man)
The Secret History of the World (unstuck in time)
Notes from the Underground (a place to stay)
Phantasmagorical (a bedtime story)
Paranoia: A Manifesto (wrecking the wall)
The Day The Music Died (running from sound and sorrow)
Abraham's Men (knights, ghosts, and shadows)
Pest Control (pulling the wings off of flies)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 06:39 AM
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I'm getting to work on the Hades-blog. It'll be called Hell and Earth, and it's basically just posting fictional scripture until Hades shows up and kills the blogger.

In the meantime, we need to get cracking and figure out exactly what our Fossils are trying to do.

EAT's ultimate goal is to make every human a Camper, and at this current stage, it has a lot of influential powers in the Genera. EAT wants the Genera to become properly government-funded, EAT wants to become the world's new government.

..wow, I just pictured a scene of, like, a Camper-higher-up greeting a big-time government official and then giving an awesome "YOU ARE NOW A CAMPER" speech. I then went "Oh, but this could never happen realistically with Liquid Len blogging," but then I realized that's why Topography Genera has multiple blogs. Stuff like that could actually happen in this story.

I'm picturing this story becoming, like, freaking Harold Saxon-esque in the later movements, y'know?

ANYWAY. EAT wants to do things like this, so EAT has to hatch a complicated plan that will be hinted at and slowly revealed throughout the story.

THE SIX DEGREES OF INNER CORRUPTION (or some other word that is like turbulence)

First degree: Assemble five Night Owls per branch (we'll say EAT has almost accomplished this by now)
Second degree: Get FT-HADES on her side (this will be happening behind the scenes, staged in a way that it simply looks like HADES doing strange things)
Third degree: Get FT-CREMATOR on her side
Fourth degree: Get FT-SELKIE out of the way
Fifth degree: Launch project DGLGMUT
Sixth degree: Get a Camper into the corresponding governments of the countries of each branch of the Genera (US, UK, Greenland, Australia)

Now, of course, the degrees will be far more complicated than just that and each will have many complications and everything, but that's just the basic rough draft outline thing.

SO, what's Project DGLGMUT? I still think this should be an artificial Fossil. EAT would be making this as a sort of.. The Dragon, a new "Fear of being controlled" after Selkie's out of the way. Except one that obeys EAT. Like the Toclafane from the aforementioned Harold Saxon serial of Doctor Who, y'know?


So. We have the Six Degrees there, plenty to do with that in terms of foreshadowing. I want there to be some kind of Twelve-Step thing as well. ..I could probably switch those six degrees to being a twelve-step process of conquering the world, and the six degrees would be a coalition of Fossils (Hades, Cremator, [grotesque], Homunculi, EAT, some sixth one) that are working together for the sake of making their own goals easier.

I dunno, I'm saying a lot now. I'll shut up and see if you have any opinions. And feel free to sum up what the Homunculi's trying to do. Feel free to be as exact and final as you want; it'll help in the long run to figure out the exact plans.


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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alliterator
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 06:43 AM
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I think HOMUNCULI would be an ally of EAT, since it also seeks out knowledge (with it's Thoughtborn). I'm going to be doing something with Subject FTH00008, where it won't be just a regular Towerborn, but something called a Towerchilde.


Faces, Strange and Secret: An Anthology of Stories from da Fears Mythos: on sale from Amazon, Kindle, and Smashwords

My Finished Stories.

My Ongoing Stories:
Channel Fear (informational, educational, cynical)
The Supernatural Anaesthetist (seeing where science takes us)
Once There Was (the king is the kingdom)
An Old Man's Winter Night (at the winter of the world)
Unwashed and Somewhat Slightly Dazed (working for the man)
The Secret History of the World (unstuck in time)
Notes from the Underground (a place to stay)
Phantasmagorical (a bedtime story)
Paranoia: A Manifesto (wrecking the wall)
The Day The Music Died (running from sound and sorrow)
Abraham's Men (knights, ghosts, and shadows)
Pest Control (pulling the wings off of flies)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 12:25 PM
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Here's the Hades-blog I made. Called Hell and Earth. I pretty much made up my own little scriptures about Hades and stuff.


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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alliterator
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 01:07 PM
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Very interesting. The only complaint I have is that it's not the Book of Revelations, it's the Book of Revelation (note the singular), also called the "Revelation of Saint John." But that's just a pet peeve of mine.


Faces, Strange and Secret: An Anthology of Stories from da Fears Mythos: on sale from Amazon, Kindle, and Smashwords

My Finished Stories.

My Ongoing Stories:
Channel Fear (informational, educational, cynical)
The Supernatural Anaesthetist (seeing where science takes us)
Once There Was (the king is the kingdom)
An Old Man's Winter Night (at the winter of the world)
Unwashed and Somewhat Slightly Dazed (working for the man)
The Secret History of the World (unstuck in time)
Notes from the Underground (a place to stay)
Phantasmagorical (a bedtime story)
Paranoia: A Manifesto (wrecking the wall)
The Day The Music Died (running from sound and sorrow)
Abraham's Men (knights, ghosts, and shadows)
Pest Control (pulling the wings off of flies)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 01:09 PM
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Consider it fixed!


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 07:48 PM
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Hell and Earth is up. Now, the last part of the first movement will be the whole "J. LaBrie" incident. Which I want to plan out.

1) Post or two piquing Liquid Len's (and the reader's) interest in EAT.
2) Messages of the higher-ups calling Len crazy or something, Doctor Cloud recommending him to go visit J. LaBrie, who was once a test subject or something or other. He was a medical officer who also claimed this thing was a Fossil before being fired.
3) The J. LaBrie incident.

I want this to be something that makes the reader fascinated. I'm talking hooked, wanting to read on. I'm worried that I've been focusing too much on world-building and setting up the atmosphere and setting that I haven't been giving people enough scares and all that. Then again, they have you for that.

WHICH REMINDS ME, I'd like it if you could make a simple post on the Center East blog basically giving a vague update (up to act 2 or whatever it is you're up to by this exact date) on The Supernatural Anaesthetist. Like "oh hey Liquid Len's being a weirdy, I'm doing just fine except for all my test subjects are dead except this one guy." And a link to the blog.

My reasoning behind that update would be for the long-run, when the entire Topography Genera is over, I want readers reading through Center East in its entirety to find the other blogs to be sorta like.. sorta like how novels often switch to different viewpoint protagonists for chapters. So the reader would read through the overture of Center East, then get the link to Cloud's blog and read through up to the end of act 1, and then read movement one of East and then get this link prompting them to read act 2. And of course, it'd really just be optional, not necessarily vital to the main story. But still important.

I'm half-asleep!

RIGHT, J. LaBrie incident. Scare.

The talk could be in LaBrie's home and maybe feature another Fossil appearing and fucking shit up. Or it could take place in Hell's Kitchen somewhere (maybe the higher-ups locked LaBrie up because he knew too much about EAT)-- OOH WHAT IF what if Len is sent on a wild goose chase to talk with who he thinks is LaBrie in some old shack but it turns out that was just a fake to get Len to stop asking about EAT? And the real LaBrie is in Hell's Kitchen, not to be found until later.

And this fake would be a sort of unperson, wiped by Cremator and brainwashed by the Genera to believe his name is "J. LaBrie" and that he was legally insane and the "new Fossil" was all in his head. AND ALL THROUGHOUT THE CONVERSATION, HE'D OCCASIONALLY STOP NERVOUSLY, OR SOMETIMES HE'D BRIEFLY MENTION SOMEONE IN THE NEXT ROOM AND AT THE END OF THE CONVERSATION, HE'D MENTION "THE CREMATOR" BUT THEN SOMETHING WOULD HAPPEN AND HE'D BE DEAD

God, all these ideas. I like this idea. Too narmy, or do you think it could work? It'd be an audio conversation, of course. I've been setting those up for a reason.


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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alliterator
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 08:01 PM
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This is all sounds really good.

Once I finished the current storyline today on Dr. Cloud's blog, I'll post on update on Center East. I just want to make sure that it's up to date - I know you backdate your posts, so I was backdating mine as well and I don't want to make a post that's current when I'm still backdating stuff.


Faces, Strange and Secret: An Anthology of Stories from da Fears Mythos: on sale from Amazon, Kindle, and Smashwords

My Finished Stories.

My Ongoing Stories:
Channel Fear (informational, educational, cynical)
The Supernatural Anaesthetist (seeing where science takes us)
Once There Was (the king is the kingdom)
An Old Man's Winter Night (at the winter of the world)
Unwashed and Somewhat Slightly Dazed (working for the man)
The Secret History of the World (unstuck in time)
Notes from the Underground (a place to stay)
Phantasmagorical (a bedtime story)
Paranoia: A Manifesto (wrecking the wall)
The Day The Music Died (running from sound and sorrow)
Abraham's Men (knights, ghosts, and shadows)
Pest Control (pulling the wings off of flies)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 1 2012, 08:05 PM
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Oh, I was trying to backdate my posts too. But then I realized I had all the posts of Hell and Earth posted today and not backdated, so I just decided to screw it and bend things a little. Take your time!


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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DJay32
 Posted: Jun 5 2012, 09:06 AM
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IDEA.

Okay, this idea comes from the likes of MOTHER 3's Ultimate Chimera, the SCP Foundation little game thing that was released that one time, and a lot of other horror works.

WHAT IF THERE'S A PART IN THE STORY, say movement four or five or six, WHERE THE PROTAGONISTS ARE TRAPPED IN THE GENERA WITH A FOSSIL THAT ESCAPED? I was thinking it could be "FT-DGLGMUT" (as well as some Fossils that actually wouldn't harm people but the Genera workers would think these Fossils are the bad ones and then BAM, FT-DGLGMUT is introduced and scares the shit out of everybody).

..okay yep wow that's a great idea, I want to do this. Of course, it wouldn't be for a long time, but I just wanted to get it down on paper before I forgot it.

SECOND IDEA, LET ME PUT THIS DOWN ON PAPER TOO.

First, Jane plans on giving me the login to Duchess' account because she most likely won't be able to write more. So I've been tossing around ideas, and what if Duchess dies? Specifically, what if Duchess, for whatever reason, goes into a Door? She could parallel Nathan going into a Door in Jordan Eats and be the turning point for a lot of things, and then Liquid Len would be better than his predecessor and not go in a Door no matter how much he may want to grieve for her.

AND THEN I had a third idea.

What if, and bear with me because this is big, what if.. Doctor Cloud dies, too? Specifically, what if Duchess dies somewhere around movement three/four, and Doctor Cloud dies at the end of the fifth movement? He'd prevent FT-HOMUNCULI and then be killed by FT-DGLGMUT in the freaky sequence. And this would coincide with how The Supernatural Anaesthetist has five acts.

Liquid Len would keep going for the last three movements (we'd probably have more characters by this point anyway), and whether he dies at the end or is still alive and provides a hopeful ending is up to where we go with this.

How does that sound?


EXHIBITS:
Viceking's Graab (Step inside the maze. You could spend an eternity here.)
The Mythology of Empathy (Eight songs, nine tracks. Welcome death.)
Ancestor (Five tracks. Death of the Artist and Chinese mythology.)
Fear (A visual art exhibit in blog format.)
Nobody anymore, never again (Another visual art exhibit in blog format.)
The Everyblogger Triad: 1, 2, 3 (Embrace the bad writing, give into your psyche.)
PLAN 31 (Frank Slenderman: Ace Attorney)
OH GOD THE RAPTURE IS BURNING (400,000 words. Five months. All Fears. Excess. On fifth draft, not final.)
Topography Genera (15 blogs. Conventional horror. See seas rise.)
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